We know what you do in your spare time
...
It's very good, yes.
All the compliments have been taken, really...
If only you could truly see
The pain you've caused inside of me.
If I were to fade away...
You wouldn't hear the words I'd say
You'd turn around and close your ears
Because you'd hear the things you fear.
I'm not as solid as I seem
The life I'm living is only your dream..
You can't run though, you cant hide.
I'm right here; you can't shove me aside.
You've caused me pain, now its finally your turn.
Your turn to hurt and your turn to learn.
Your turn to feel and your turn to burn.
Your turn to crash and your turn to die.
Your turn to decay, in a sewer of lies.
My favourite. A few times in the others they were a little.. hmm... repetitive maybe, but the vocab in this one was a lot better. A bit slow at the start hbut it peaked at just the right time at the end with the sewer of lies.
Didn't like the rhyming at the very start though.
It gave it a great effect at the end. Really enjoyed reading it.
Love to see more.
