Why I Cried

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Why I Cried

Postby Simatra » Friday 25 May 2007 10:54:30pm

Why I Cried

Tick, Tick, Thump
Tick, Tick, Thump.
My heart pounding
Two hours I’ve been waiting.
Listening to the clock winding
Doctor’s and nurses rushing
I had my hands around
Mother’s stomach, thinking,
Father was always so careful.
I never dreamed of a day
When I would cry.
I remember how proud
He was the day I hit a
Home run.
I remember the way that
Father cried when he said,
“Does he have to go to school?”
But I mostly remember
What he did when they took
Him away from the crash.
Through the blazing and blaring sirens,
Through the people that were watching,
He spoke to me,
Not Mother, me,
And said…
“I love you Danny.”


I wrote this last year and this is also the poem I won the poetry contest with. I hope you liked it.
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Postby FawkesthePhoenix » Saturday 26 May 2007 2:41:53pm

wow. that's really good, simatra. that's good enough to be published. more than good enough, really.
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Postby Simatra » Saturday 26 May 2007 7:01:27pm

Ahhhh,... Thanks Fawkes. :oops: Look you made me blush. I hope some more people will read it!
And I normally don't write poems, I usaully write storys. If I do write poems they mostly end up being corny.... But this peom I'm rather proud of really.
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Postby FawkesthePhoenix » Saturday 26 May 2007 8:23:05pm

you should be, it's very good.
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Postby DucksRMagical » Sunday 27 May 2007 1:33:22am

It is a very good poem! I know what you mean about corny poems, I'm very bad at writing poems. Last year in creative writing we had to write this specific kind of poem (don't remember what it was) and I couldn't think of anything to write about so I wrote it about not liking to write poems, and my teacher liked it! :lol:
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Postby GodrictheGriffon » Monday 28 May 2007 4:50:54pm

Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! Simatra! That is so sad! I sit true? :cry:
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Postby Simatra » Tuesday 29 May 2007 6:19:49pm

Thanks! And no, it's not true, but my dad was upset and he doesn't like it.

I wonder why... :roll:
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Postby Un'Anima Persa » Monday 20 August 2007 5:21:16am

This is really good. I like it a lot.
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Postby GodrictheGriffon » Wednesday 22 August 2007 4:08:59pm

Why are parts of it in Japanese computer speak and French?
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