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Summer Vacation

Postby harry_loves_ginny » Monday 18 July 2005 2:09:34am

this is my first fan fic piece of work so please be honest in my skills
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Summer Vacation

Postby harry_loves_ginny » Monday 18 July 2005 2:29:07am

As The Hogwarts Express makes it's way to London, Harry looks out the window wondering whether he'd ever see Hogwarts again.

"Harry, what's wrong?" Ginny asked.

"Nothing" He said

"Come off it" Ron said "What's really wrong?"

"I was just thinking this may be the last time we see dumbledore..." Harry found it difficult to admit that dumbledore actually died.

"Harry, whats that?" Hermione said pointing to his cloak.

"My cloak?" harry said gingerly

"No, Harry, there's a letter in your cloak"

Harry picked up his cloak and saw a letter fall out. In slanted writing it said Harry Potter. This was dumbledore's writing. He opened it up and it read ...
..................................................

Dear Harry,
If you get this letter than sadly, i have past away. Although you know that you do have to visit your aunt and uncle for at least one day, i have 4 tickets to a beach about 50 miles from hogsmeade. I want you to bring whoever you want. There is a few enchantments at the place you will be visiting... you can only get in the place if you wear one of four stones i have included in this letter

I hope that you have a wonderful summer and all i ask of you is to take Fawkes with you. He always loved the beach. There is also a small whistle included to call upon him.

Best wishes,
Albus Dumbledore


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Harry showed the letter to Ginny then to Ron and Hermione.

"Do you think the 3 of you can go?" Harry asked
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continued

Postby harry_loves_ginny » Monday 18 July 2005 2:30:28am

i will continue later... k? tell me what you thought of it
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Postby Bergdorfblonde » Monday 18 July 2005 10:55:57am

looks really nice... I m waiting for the continuation :-)
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Postby xXxFawkesSong » Monday 18 July 2005 9:43:34pm

Sweet deal. I liked it ;) Hurry up writing the next part :D
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Postby thestral » Tuesday 19 July 2005 1:38:12pm

keep truckin'. looks good. i want to hear from fawkes again. i love that bird!!! :grin:
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Postby Scarlet Lioness » Wednesday 20 July 2005 2:00:30am

Awesome keep going...

Looking forward to the rest!!!~~~
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Postby Scarlet Lioness » Wednesday 20 July 2005 2:01:05am

Awesome keep going...

Looking forward to the rest!!!~~~
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Postby Un'Anima Persa » Friday 22 July 2005 11:42:09pm

Thats a great start! Looking forward to more!
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Postby ellenmay » Saturday 23 July 2005 4:39:09pm

Keep going with this one. You are off to a great start. :)
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Postby crystallised_pineapple » Sunday 24 July 2005 1:59:15pm

yeah i like the way this is going... keep going i'm enjoying it :D
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continued soon

Postby harry_loves_ginny » Wednesday 27 July 2005 8:28:08pm

i will continue this later... i am going to right the next segmint in microsoft works then paste it here
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Postby Phoenix in the Ashes » Thursday 28 July 2005 7:40:42am

Sounds like a good idea, keep it going...
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Postby child of darkness » Saturday 30 July 2005 6:37:33pm

good start but look out for tense mistakes such as passed instead of past. Sorry to be commenting on the small things it's just the way i am. A good story and i look forward to the next art keep it up ;)
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continuation (finally!!!)

Postby harry_loves_ginny » Thursday 8 September 2005 9:44:41pm

Ginny: Well, if mum lets us

Hermione: Absulutly!!!

Harry: Ok, it's settled

Hermione: Hey Ron! Look at that outside the compartment!

Ron: What? Oh ya, (goes red) you guys... um... stay here.

They walk out

Harry: Ok... Whats up with them?

Ginny: I dunno

:eek: Ginny starts snogging harry :eek:

They here hermione and ron come 5 mins later

Harry: So, umm... (goes red) what was all that about?

Ron: Fred and George had a...

Harry: Fred and George arn't here

Hermione: What Ron MEANT (glaring at Ron) is that Luna had a (mumbles)

Ginny: What?

Ron: a (mumbles)
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They arrive at the cottage (next time)
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