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Brand New

Postby pinky p » Monday 1 September 2003 4:38:51am

taking Meg's example, i have named my story "Brand New", which is what my story is as well as one of my favorite bands :grin:

this is my first stab at fan fiction, so don't expect anything of Meg or Zledm's quality :o

i just wrote a bit... tell me if it's any good, perhaps i'll write some more :-?

The sun was just creeping over the rooftops of london and as it reached the very old and unkempt shingles of number 12, Grimmauld Place, a loud chorus of screams echoed through that particular house.

"Mummy! MUUUUUUUUMMYYYYYYYYY!" The screams could be traced to a second story bedroom, where a pale and skinny eleven year old girl with flaming red hair was crying in her bed.

"Molly, be quiet! It's a fake! Shhh!" The other occupant of the room, a tall and gangly fourteen year old boy, pulled something that strongly resembled a thick black cloak off the bed.

A middle aged woman with a slightly wrinkled face and red hair not quite as vibrant as the girl’s came dashing into the room. She stood in the doorway scanning the room, her wand withdrawn and her nightgown fluttering in the breeze from the window. Her eyes fell upon the guilty face of the boy.

“James! What is this?” She snatched the cloak from his arms and started examining it closely, occasionally tapping it with the wand.

“Oh, nothing really…”

“James, do you really think that you can keep playing these pranks on your sister? It is entirely unacceptable and when your father comes back-”

“Is he coming, Mummy? Is he really coming?” The girl interjected, her face lit up with excitement.

“Molly, go downstairs and get some breakfast. See that you don’t awaken Mrs. Black, I have a headache. Your brother and I will be down in a moment.”

The girl obediantly left the room, her excitement somewhat lessened. She tiptoed though the front hallway, carefully avoiding a curtain hanging on the wall as she went down into the kitchen.

A half hour later all three of them were sitting at a large table which could have easily seated fifteen people. Molly was chatting merrily about “Daddy’s visit” while the other two threw dangerous looks at each other.

When the meal was over, “Mummy” started the dishes at washing themselves and she settled down comfortably at the table once more, reading a newspaper called “The Daily Prophet” that an owl had brought. Molly and James had started playing chess with a very unusual set that seemed to move around when a large brown owl started tapping at the window with it’s beak.

Molly started up from her chair so ernestly that she tripped and fell over. James ran to the window and let in the owl, taking a letter that was tied to it’s leg. He had only just begun to read it when the woman took it from him.

“It is for me, is it not?” She asked icily.

“Well, yes, but it’s from-“

“Daddy!” Cried Molly exitedly, getting up and dancing about the room in a frenzy.

“Yeah.” James answered. “Dad.” The woman had already plunked herself back down in her chair, the newspaper forgotten as she hungrily read the letter. Molly and James were watching her excitedly. Once she was done, she placidly placed the letter back into its envelope and looked up at her children. Her face was calm, but her dancing eyes gave away her excitement.

“Your father is coming for a visit.” Her voice was alive with delightment and sounded twenty years younger.

“When, when?” Molly exclaimed.

“Today.” The Mother answered.

Just then, the door bell rang and loud screams erupted from the front hallway. They were all ignoring the painting on the wall, whose occupent was screaming terribly. All three dashed up into the hall and Molly practically threw open the door.

A tall, lean man stood in the doorway. His black hair was greying and his forehead was creased, but his green eyes were as vivid and his hair as rumpled as it had ever been.

“Harry!” The woman breathed.
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Postby gecko » Monday 1 September 2003 9:56:08am

I love it! At first I really didn't realise who James and Molly were! :P
And who is the woman...?

keep it coming! :razz:
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Postby Meg Boyd » Monday 1 September 2003 3:53:59pm

pinkyprincess12303 wrote:this is my first stab at fan fiction, so don't expect anything of Meg or Zledm's quality


what are you talking about??? This fan fiction is awesome! I really really enjoyed it...it must be in the wisconsin water, eh????? (zledy and I are also from wisconsin...he he he)

I have a hunch on who the red hair woman is, but I don't want to spoil it for the rest...

eh, all this fan fiction stuff reminds me of my two stories that are rotting away. perhaps I should work on them a bit, eh??? That is on my to do list!!!
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wow!

Postby pinky p » Tuesday 2 September 2003 2:22:55am

thanks guys! i supppose that now some people like my story, i should write some more... not now though, and eek! school starts tomorrow!

thanks for the support :grin:

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Postby Meg Boyd » Tuesday 2 September 2003 12:48:22pm

that's right, you are from wisconsin, and you are part of the 99% of the WI schools who got to start after Labor Day...zledm007 and I however are from that 1% of WI schools who started last week...he he he...

good luck with school and I can't wait to read more!
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section two

Postby pinky p » Wednesday 3 September 2003 3:41:03am

okay, here comes section two! sorry it took a bit, i have no "pre-written story" and my school just started.



“Ginny!” He returned her warm welcome.

There was a man standing behind Harry. He was tall and lanky, with a crop of red hair flecked with grey. Both men stepped in and James shut the door behind them. In a second, Harry was down on his knees as his family crowded around him, all talking at once.

“It’s so lonesome here without you Harry, us not being able to leave and all…”

“And then he put a fake lethifold on my bed, but I wasn’t scared a bit…”

“I’m expecting my letter any day now, I can’t wait to go back and see all my friends…”

“Hold on now, everyone! We can tell all our stories later. Me and Weasley here are very tired and-“

“Ron!” Ginny exclaimed. “I didn’t see you!” She embraced the man, who was a bit taken aback by her sudden advances. “Let me have a good look at you, now!” She took a step back and looked Ron over from overlarge feet to the mop of carrot colored hair.

“You haven’t changed a bit!” She finally decided. “How’s Loony- I mean, Luna-“ she blushed a bit, “And the kids?”

“Oh they’re- alright, considering…” He trailed off.

“Where are you staying?”

“The burrow, for the time being.”

“Oh? And, er-“ She glanced at the kids- “Dad still has his job?” She whispered almost inaudably.

“Well… For the time being. I expect Dumbledore has put his oar in. Everyone’s trying to ruin him, too, of course, but…”

“Not now, Ron, not now.” Harry said decidedly. “James, Molls, why don’t you go make your Uncle Ron a bed.”

James and Molly, who were inching as close as they could to the conversation, obediantly left the hall, walking by the shreiking portrait.

“It doesn’t take two people to make a damn bed.” Molly heard James mutter as they made their way up the stairs.

Just before the adults were out of earshot, Molly heard her mother ask, “Now what has happened?”



hope y'all like!

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Postby Meg Boyd » Wednesday 3 September 2003 12:59:33pm

and the plot thickens....muhahahaha...this is good...I am not sure I like the Ron-Luna thing, but hey it is YOUR story and the beauty of writting your story is that you are the master of everyone else's domain!!!!! Kudos to you because this is a really stand up piece of work, and I realy do think there is something in the water in Wisconsin...tee hee hee
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yay!

Postby pinky p » Wednesday 3 September 2003 9:15:37pm

yes, it must be all the extra cheese that gets the writing part of your brain moving :grin:
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Postby gecko » Wednesday 3 September 2003 9:18:41pm

This is really good! I like Ron and Luna together, though I personally think that Harry-Luna is more likely :P !
Do continue!
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Postby Meg Boyd » Thursday 4 September 2003 1:29:26am

perhaps we should send JKR some colby-jack cheese or "Something Special From Wisconsin" to get her creative writing juices flowing!!!!
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Postby pinky p » Thursday 4 September 2003 9:35:48pm

just the thing :grin:

oh gosh, i need more story don't i?
would one of you tell someone else about my story, so far only two people have read it. gracias

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Postby pinky p » Friday 5 September 2003 1:55:52am

super sorry for the double post! i just want to say.. well. sorry i took part in a conversation about- :oops: - cheese :o

i'll try to stay on subject from now on :grin:
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Postby almost2sweet24 » Saturday 6 September 2003 1:39:56am

Heyy your stories AWESOME!! Keep going..(btw i'm from Michigan..where we have no talent..just lakes.. :( ) but I really like it..I didn't get the whole James/Molly thing at first..but now I doo :D Keep going!! Oh and don't complain..I started school August 20th!..little off topic..
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Postby pinky p » Saturday 6 September 2003 2:12:00am

holy cow, thanks!

okay okay okay
i'm writing more story today

i promise

or else sometime this weekend :oops:
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Postby almost2sweet24 » Saturday 6 September 2003 2:46:41am

Haha..well not to put too much pressure on you..:D
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