Summer Vacation

[Asphodel]

You should practice by trying to use proper grammar in all your posts. Also, I'm not sure if I already said this, but a lot of people will give up on reading your story if there are no quotation marks. This is torturing the reader, making it hard for them to distinguish who is talking. The number one rule in writing: FEEL THE READER'S PAIN.

[harry_loves_ginny]

Ron and Hermione dragged Harry and Ginny into the closet. Suddenly they were falling down... down... down...

"I'm glad you've finally made it to my lovely home, and you brought along that foolish girl I made do my biddings in your second year, I suppose." Voldemort cackled evily. "You'll fall for ANYTHING won't you?"

"You wrote the letter!" Harry exclamed as he was trying to get up, but he just couldn't move. "Dumblidore (sorry for the spelling error) doesn't believe that dying was a sad thing, he said 'Death is just another adventure'! How could I have been so stupid?" Harry smacked himself on the forehead. "and you put Ron and Hermione under the(o great i cant remember the name of the spell)curse!"

"Not particularily, when the curse is lifted, they'll remember all the horrible, evil deeds they did" Voldemort snickered "It is quite brilliant, isn't it?"

Before Harry could do anything, Ginny had jumped up and had pointed her wand at Voldemort.

Voldemort lazily raised his wand and said "Avada Kadavera" Harry didn't know what happened, but it appeared he got up and apparated them both before the curse reached Ginny. Harry had no idea how he did all that, but he looked up, because Ginny kept tapping his shoulder. Standing before him was Lupin, Tonks, and the rest of the order. They helped him up and Tonks said (whose hair was her usual pink bubblegum colour) "Bloody hell Harry! what happened?"

[Phoenix in the Ashes]

Spelling:

Dumbledore
Imperius Curse
Particularly
Avada Kedavra

Just to note eh... Goods stuff otherwsie, made heaps of improvements!

[Asphodel]

YAY!!! QOUTATION MARKS!!! A few grammar mistakes aside, that was pretty good!

[Phoenix in the Ashes]

Yes, you did much, much better!

Obviously we now know that you can do it!

There was no reason to stop up that other topic though...

[Bextra]

Is there going to be any more to that story or does it just stop?

[Asphodel]

Yeah... you plan on continuing? I think this can turn into a pretty good story...

[Bextra]

D*mn straight. [Bextra, do try please -TPR-]

[Phoenix in the Ashes]

Language please, Bextra.

Yes, I think it'd turn out quite interesting if you kept writing, but I understand if you don't feel like it.

Do you think we could have a sort of Fan-fiction Take Turns sort of thing?

[Asphodel]

Oh like one of those competitions where someone starts a story and people continue it? But isn't that kinda like RPG?

[Bextra]

Not really, coz you don't have to create a character, and its not in the RPG section.

[Asphodel]

Yeah, I guess. You can pick the best part of the story and give the author of it mental recognition .

[Phoenix in the Ashes]

I actually think it's a good idea.

Each person takes turns in continuing the story.

There would have to be a theme though.

[Asphodel]

We should make a challenge to it! Like at the end of each part of the story write something like: "The next author must make Joe evil." or "The next author must include the words Fillibuster's, pumpkin, and nautical"

[Phoenix in the Ashes]

I agree. And I also think that we should be able to say things that the next author can't do.

[eg. The next author can't make Joe evil. And the next post cannot involve anyone being killed.]

And I think that we'd surely require a plot.

If this is in fan-fic, then umm?

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